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I think what makes a poem is your ability to sync words and phrases so that they rhyme and make sense. You did that perfectly: you set they scene, carved ...

:D I'm terribly sorry, but i don't think you should do ANYTHING to this. Its absolutely perfect just the way it is, it is whimsical but also carries a subliminal ...

I don't know what to say, you obviously have a great talent for poetry. When I read it, i instinctively looked for an age, expecting to see 16-18.I agree the ...

Hey its think again, tired of long posts so ill just do point forms =): 1.) Good use of imagery again, you captured the innocence of the whale.And your comparison ...

Poetry is not black and white, please remember poetic license allows the poet some degree of alteration in both meaning and pronunciation. So tharlam is right to use shriners, even ...

truly epic piece, if i was you i would frame it,laminate it. Keep it safe until its published and i can purchase it =). It was strides ahead of most ...

Hmm, it was indeed a very powerful piece. particularly loved "Rested in the ether among the stars, ". use of imagery helps us to visualize the peaceful scene you are ...

well,it didn't jump out at me as being amazing until the second reading (leave me alone i just woke up *hiss*). Even though it didnt rhyme your choice of words ...

James spluttered and coughed dirt into his hand. He lay prostrate on the floor in front of his favorite tavern, “The Full Keg”. After a boisterous row with the owner, ...

James spluttered and coughed dirt into his hand. He lay, prostrate on the floor in front of his favorite tavern, “The Full Keg”. After a boisterous row with the owner, ...

first off, i thought it was very well written, with no real mistakes that i could spot with a glance. My only thing is its length, I know you may ...

thank you for your responce Avens, i am currently rewriting it completely and i will try and post it a bit later on today. ~just got to trust in the ...

writing comes naturally, as we learn to speak we learn to write letters and form sentences. BUT im sure you didnt mean writing in the academic term lol, so yeh ...

The door slammed shut, grating across the wooden floor. A lock was drawn across the door. It spilt a cloud of rust and dirt under it, which diffused into the ...

thank you for responding, hehe yeh i have some major punctuation problems don't i? i am currently working on that,yet i do wish to spend the time it takes to ...